Hoo boy. This one again.
And it’s different.
If you saw my last blog update, you’ll know I’ve been working on two classic Who stories, Silver Nemesis and Resurrection of the Daleks. I provided a sample of what I’ve been up to with Resurrection, but with this you’re getting a full story.
Seventeen minutes is what I was able to reduce this to. No Lady Pentforte and Richard (and, by association, the skinheads and the obnoxious American tourist), not much of The Doctor and Ace mucking about in Windsor, the Nazis exist only to ensure we get a decent massacre by the Cybermen (and yes, their leader and his right hand kind of do vanish afterwards, but just assume they are killed), and The Doctor and Ace get to the heart of the matter and arrange a final stand against the Cybermen right after Ace blows up their vessel (just assume The Doctor used a gravitational lift to move the Nemesis from its crater into the TARDIS and then into the warehouse).
I also greatly prefer the Nemesis to be of unknown origin. None of that living metal nonsense. It’s a harbinger of destruction, the Cybermen want to use it since they’re gung-ho about invading Earth as you do, and The Doctor’s out to trap them. You don’t need that bollocks about Penteforte forging the statue in her likeness and Ace being in transfixed awe about the statue.
The only thing more or less retained from my original edit of this was the decision to have the Cyber-Thugs attack The Doctor and Ace after the jazz session serve as the pre-credits
And how did the Cybermen know about Penteforte to begin with? Not explained.
-Cut the bow being taken out of the case by De Flores
-Cut The Doctor discovering the Bow isn’t in the case
-Cut the power blackout at Windsor
-Cut The Doctor and Ace waltzing around the castle and meeting Her Reptilian Majesty and her Corgis.
-Absolutely everything to do with Penteforte. No astrologer, no indifferent crowds in the café, no skin heads, no American tourist, no skirmish at her castle or her tomb with the arrow. The arrow is already with Nemesis, and all references to her by The Doctor, Ace, Cybermen, and Nemesis cut.
-Every scene with DeFlores and Karl after the attack by the Cybermen at the Nemesis crash site cut. No gold dust malarkey, no false betrayal, no thanking The Doctor for relieving them of the threat posed by the Cybermen.
-Cut The Doctor and Ace jamming the Cybermen’s signal with Jazz music
-Cut Nemesis awakening within her tomb and journeying back to the warehouse
-Cut The Doctor saying “Unfinished business” as he plays chess with Ace.
-Cut Richard playing them music at the end
-Cut Ace asking The Doctor who he is.
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Still on a Doctor Who kick. I thought I’d take another stab at some new ideas for Dark Water/Death In Heaven
Sort of anyway, since one of the ideas was borrowed from fellow DW faneditor Whoflix, check out his own Death In Heaven edit here
All credit to him for the bit where Clara and The Doctor arrive at 3W more immediately. I might also incorporate his idea of losing Clara’s gran too
Combining Dark Water and Death in Heaven into one episode is the easy option, but on each attempt I made at it I was never quite satisfied with it, so I decided to approach it from a different angle, and still treat it as a standard two-parter, modifying things slightly so as to minimize some of Danny Pink and Seb’s interaction and keep the focus on The Doctor and Clara as they arrive at 3W. The ending of part one is also slightly altered to incorporate an extra few minutes from “Death In Heaven” which helps build towards our new, and I feel more appropriate, cliffhanger given The Master’s whole scheme hinges on it as a plot point later.
Here’s the first sample, removing Clara’s emotional blackmail of The Doctor at the volcano and removing Danny’s first conversation with Seb
Password to view sample: water
Sample two with the new cliffhanger
Password to view sample: water
What’s This About? Basically to take the three episodes from the third season of the BBC Sherlock series and reimagine two of them
Episode One is The Little That Remains, a trim of “The Empty Hearse” (it’s named as such because it uses as little of the episode as possible, in addition to being a quote from the Holmes of the novels), removing such things as Sherlock’s explanation as to how he survived so there is some aura of mystery to his methods of survival and focuses principally on the case at hand rather than all the storyline details pertaining to the major arc of the series (except for one tiny detail that pays off in the third episode)
Episode Two is Adventure of Cam, it is the culmination of the principle storyline themes of the third series with a more swift and immediate Sherlock and John working out Mary’s case.
Running Time for each
1. The Little That Remains-49 minutes
2. The Adventure of CAM-1 hour, 8 minutes
–Removed Anderson’s “bungee cord” theory.
-Added a few minutes of “Many Happy Returns” mini-sode up until Anderson realizes Sherlock is returning. Titles follow.
-Reporters talking about Holmes being vindicated cut.
-John morning Sherlock and going on the tube cut
-John entering the apartment and explaining his upcoming engagement to Mrs. Hudson cut.
-Sherlock’s capture, torture, and meeting with Mycroft cut
-Sherlock being briefed by Mycroft on the terrorist attack cut. Sherlock making plans to surprise John cut
-John explaining his situation to Mrs. Hudson cut
-Sherlock and Molly solving several cases cut
-Jack The Ripper investigation cut
-Removed flash of light and fade out when John readies himself for the end
-Removed Sherlock explaining to Anderson how he survived and Anderson’s breakdown
-Sherlock meeting Molly’s rebound boyfriend cut
SHERLOCK: THE ADVENTURE OF CAM
-John and Mary in bed cut
-Title sequence plays after Sherlock meets John in the drug den
-Molly slapping Sherlock after the piss test shortened to just the one slap
-Deleted Scene added after Sherlock is shot
-Sherlock’s struggle to stay alive within the mind palace after being shot significantly cut
-Sherlock and Janine at the hospital cut
-Sherlock and John confronting Mary in the abandoned housing urging her to use her gun cut
-Moriarty’s “Did you miss me” montage cut
-Closing credits song is “Thunder In Your Heart” from Stan Bush
In time I will be uploading the new versions to Vimeo.
Online drama is no fun, and now that I’ve had a chance to think about it, and after a small chat with Dan Slott where he clarified a few things in a civil manner, I realize maybe it is time to give some things a rest.
So, Dan, if you’re reading this, I hope this suffices as a small token of my appreciation for how you were with me. I know we’ll probably not enjoy thanksgiving dinners, but I do hope we can stand firm on less patchier ground in future.
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This is a fanedit of the Doctor Who season seven episode “The Angels Take Manhattan”, all that’s been removed is the ending where Amy and Rory perish at the Angel’s touch, as well as the removal of Rory’s headstone and The Doctor stumbling on the chapter named “Amelia’s Last Farewell” and telling River out of frustration to change the future. Everything else is the same